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Help me word/puncuate these sentences... anyone?

Mrs.GregMrs.Greg member
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I'm working on my first paper for school - YAY!! But I need some help with a couple sentences:

"I think most every event and experience in my life played a part in the person I am today."

I feel like there's just something wrong with the wording there. Any suggestions? Or does it sound good?

"The decision to pursue a career in education is a second career for me, a second chance to find my niche."

I don't like that I wrote career twice but I don't what other word to use. Also, that should be a comma, right?
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Re: Help me word/puncuate these sentences... anyone?

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    CabbageCabbage said:


     "I think most every event and experience in my life played a part in the person I am today."

    Most every is a bad phrase. I would change it to almost every or, even better, be more specific and say,

     "Many events and experiences in my life have played a part in the person I am today."

     "The decision to pursue a career in education is a second career for me, a second chance to find my niche."  

    It's passive. I'd say, "I have decided to pursue education as a second career and view it as a second opportunity to find my niche."


    So, pretty much just go with what Lala said. 


    Oh yeah, I totally did. Word for word :)
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    Mrs.Greg said:

    CabbageCabbage said:


     "I think most every event and experience in my life played a part in the person I am today."

    Most every is a bad phrase. I would change it to almost every or, even better, be more specific and say,

     "Many events and experiences in my life have played a part in the person I am today."

     "The decision to pursue a career in education is a second career for me, a second chance to find my niche."  

    It's passive. I'd say, "I have decided to pursue education as a second career and view it as a second opportunity to find my niche."


    So, pretty much just go with what Lala said. 
    -- stuck together --

    Oh yeah, I totally did. Word for word :)

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