Grammar Police...

Re: Grammar Police...

• TeacherVicky member

  August 2010

  medblonde:

  Frequently staying over school breaks and the summer to volunteer, she learned the value of giving back to the community, further developed (developing?) her patient care skills.

  Lindsay?s roles (should this be "role has"?) have expanded over the years to increasing patient care responsibilities, directing and delegating responsibilities to team members, to playing a key role in the teaching clinical interviewing and exam skills to junior medical students.

  Lindsay continued to pursued through college and into her first year of medical school.   (Huh?  Is this a complete sentence?)
  

  Ok I'm French and function in French, but I'll try to help...

  1. it would be developing

  2. role has

  3. I believe your last sentence might be incomplete (I don't know what it is getting at) and that it should say pursue.

   

  

  
  

  
  

  
  

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• mkoelker member

  August 2010

   This is what I would have made it sound like... Someone else may have better ideas.  Frequently staying over school breaks and the summer to volunteer, she learned the value of giving back to the community; further developing her patient care skills.Lindsay?s role has expanded over the years to increasing patient care responsibilities, directing and delegating responsibilities to team members and playing a key role in the teaching clinical interviewing and exam skills to junior medical students.Lindsay has continued to pursue through college and into her first year of medical school.   (Huh?  Is this a complete sentence?)  

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• Jessicamz member

  August 2010

  medblonde:

  I need some major help.  I have my dean's letter going out for when I apply to residencies.  I have to approve it, but I suspect that it is full of grammar errors (but I'm really horrible with grammar).  Can you someone take a look at these sentences and tell me if I'm correct?  I think I have looked at this too many times that I am totally numb to the entire thing.   Thank you so so sosossososos much...but I really don't have anyone else to read this thing (I would have a friend but most of them are my "competition" at this point).
  

  Frequently staying over school breaks and the summer to volunteer, she learned the value of giving back to the community, further developed (developing?) her patient care skills.

  Lindsay?s roles (should this be "role has"?) have expanded over the years to increasing patient care responsibilities, directing and delegating responsibilities to team members, to playing a key role in the teaching clinical interviewing and exam skills to junior medical students.

  Lindsay continued to pursued through college and into her first year of medical school.   (Huh?  Is this a complete sentence?)
  

  Yes, it should be developing.

  The 2nd paragraph is confusing me.  Are the roles listed all new ones?  If so, I'd change it and take out the word "to" before the word "playing" and also "the" before "teaching."  I'd also add the word "and" before "playing."  So the new sentence would say... Lindsay's roles have expanded over the years to increasing patient care responsibilities, directing and delegating responsibilities to team members, and playing a key role in teaching clinical interviewing and exam skills to junior medical students.

  I'd say pursue but you need to say what she is pursuing so it makes more sense. 

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• medblonde

  August 2010

  Awesome.  Thank so much everyone. 

  This is a letter about me...written by the dean of my school.  I'm supposed to make sure it is "perfect" before it goes out.  It's like playing spot the grammar and spelling errors and I have no idea what she is getting at with some of these sentences. 
  

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• ColoRxGirl

  August 2010

  medblonde:

  ETA (one more): Her experience at the clinic, have (has?) helped further hone her patient care, communication and leadership skills.
  

  I would try:

  Her experiences at the clinic have further honed her patient care, communication and leadership skills.
  

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• OrangeCrush9

  August 2010

  Trying to do this by phone, so please excuse the abbreviated nature and lack of formatting. I hope it makes sense! Here are my thoughts: Yes, it's "developing." Second paragraph has a couple problems. Keeping changes minimal, I would say "lindsay's role has...by (NoT "to") increasing ..., and playing a...." Third one is missing an object. Lindsay continued to pursue WHAT?? And "...experience at the clinic has...."

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• sinisterkat01

  August 2010

  medblonde:

  Frequently staying over school breaks and the summer to volunteer, she learned the value of giving back to the community, further developed (developing?) her patient care skills.

   This sentence needs to be broken up into two or three different parts.  It is a bit of a run-on.

  Try this . . . Since Lindsay frequently stayed over school breaks to volunteer, she learned the value of giving back to the community, and further developed her patient care skills

  Lindsay?s roles (should this be "role has"?) have expanded over the years to increasing patient care responsibilities, directing and delegating responsibilities to team members, to playing a key role in the teaching clinical interviewing and exam skills to junior medical students.

  Role has expanded over the years to include increased patient care responsibilities, the delegation of responsibilities to other team members, and teaching clinical interview and exam skills . . .

  Lindsay continued to pursued through college and into her first year of medical school.   (Huh?  Is this a complete sentence?)

  Pursued is misused in this sentence.  What are we trying to say?  That Lindsay pursued a certain goal during college and medical school? 

  ETA (one more): Her experience at the clinic, have (has?) helped further hone her patient care, communication and leadership skills.
  

  Has.  And you don't need the comma after the word clinic.

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